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photo courtesy of Lora Mitchell
Twenty five cards are lined up on the mantelpiece. My daughter is smiling as she pours drinks for everyone, pleased so many have thought of her today.
The party moves outside where boyfriend Dan is busy lining up rockets, fixing Catherine wheels to posts, balancing Roman candles along the flat bit of the fence. He is grinning. He organised this dual ‘event’.
I stand watching the bonfire being lit, the rockets launched into the night sky, Dan’s big red face. He should take care.
I hadn’t known you could buy ‘Divorce’ cards and on reflection, I preferred Guy.
(100 words)
Everyone likes the first one even if he does not bring joy to the woman seeing the fireworks.
Tom
You can tell I’m not British as I had to look up “touchpaper.” But it looks to me as if there are going to be more fireworks than those Dan’s getting ready to ignite. My question, though, is–whose boyfriend is Dan? At first read, I thought the daughter’s, then decided the narrator’s. Sounds like trouble no matter the answer, though.
Yes your first impression was right, Dan is the daughter’s boyfriend.
After posting this story, it occurred to me that “Guy Fawkes Night” is a British thing, but other countries do have ‘Bonfire Nights’ so I hoped the story would still stack up.
Thanks as always for your comment
Another interesting interpretation!
Thank you Joe
Nicely done!
Scott
Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/01/02/friday-fictioneers-historical-fiction/
Thanks Scott, I’m off to read yours
Great, Thanks!
You fooled me… and no doubt everyone who reads this story. I especially liked the last 3 words… the perfect ending.
Thank you Ted
Loved the cool voice in this; a really original take on the prompt. I think I prefer Guy too…
Me too.
Thanks Sandra
Dear Dee,
Now there’s a wicked twist. Amusing.
shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle
Dear Dee,
you can even find “Nice Story” cards if you look hard enough. Going to find one to send to your for this one theis week. Well done.
Aloha,
Doug
Dear Doug
Thank you, look forwrd to it
Take care
Dee
Hi Dee,
Any excuse for a party! Great twist at the end! Ron
Hi Ron
Yep, party on!
Thanks for reading
Dee
going right along and bam, a twist and surprise. Nice one.
Thanks for stopping by, glad you liked it
I don’t think so I would’ve imagined the twist in the end. A very fresh interpretation on the pic prompt.
Thank you, glad you liked it
uh oh. she has regrets? well, we’re learning that nothing is permanent. . well done.
Thank you sir
sir. i’m going to enjoy that for a while.
a good twist!
Glad you liked it
Interesting take on the prompt. the mother speaks out of concern, intuition and experience. I’d listen to her, but then again I am not her love struck daughter.
…. And that’s the problem. We all think we know what’s best for us, sometimes were right and sometimes ‘mother knows best’
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